Can you please re-write is paragaraph more professional way please: \"Hello ever
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Question
Can you please re-write is paragaraph more professional way please:
"Hello everyone, first of all I want to take this time to say thank you to X for taking care of this event and gather all of us here in this wonderful place. My name is X, an student of electrical engineering at X university. I am in my senior year and seeking to graduate next fall. Therefore it was very important to me get achieve my some entry level job experience. The reason why I want to work for this company is to obtain technical experiences and learn as much as I can to improve my skills. Being a student of electrical engineering I wanted to have some electrician experience, Although my internship required me to work with instrumentation technician and this was even better. Another reason is that, This company has an excellent reputation and a long history of leadership in the Mining industry and to be part of this company is a life time experience. Without a doubt, At the same time wanted to gain the knowledge of entry level job operation.
Explanation / Answer
Hello everyone! Firstly I would like to thank (congratulate) X for managing the event in such a wonderful way. I am X from electrical engineering department of X university. Currently I am in my senior year and seeking to graduate in next fall. So, at this point of time, it is very crucial for me to achieve some entry level job experience (in order to understand the corporate world).
Being an electrical engineering student, I wanted to gain some experience as an electrician. However, working as an instrumentation technician as a part of my internship would provide me an added advantage. Company X has excellent reputation in the Mining industry. It is continuously leading the industry from a long-time. So, working with the company would provide me a life-time experience. Besides this, it would also help me to improvise my knowledge and technical skills.